Blog 10

Send your rough draft of the annotated bib and your outline by Monday night, 6pm via email

10 sources total, 5 of which are from journals/ scholarly sources, 5 from reputable places using CRAAP, pop culture examples (qualify them–explain that they are fictional, nut that they can still help us understand certain things)

idea****Talk about making a safety package like the jungle scene from bachelor.

Pose a hypothesis first at the top of your outline

HIGH SCHOOL ANALOGY OF BURGER:

Top of the bun–intro

Meat–body

Bottom of bun–conclusion

DELUXE BURGER NOW:

1. Intro par 1: Start with a personal example that explains why you researched this topic, or share a story from your pop culture sources ( qualify it and say it’s fiction.. Uri the guide is not a real person)
2. INTRO PARA 2: Define all of your terms. Slow down, and explain what your most important key terms mean. Ex: EMP–explain what it is in your own terms.
3. INTRO PARA 3: thesis paragraph where you explain your solution and how you’ll structure it.

BRIDGE bet INTRO and BODY

Describe a possible scenario that will cause a disaster. In a proposal, stick to that genre. Use logos. Use qualifiers–explain that it’s hypothetical. Be concise( no more than 1-2 para). Avoid changing genres and making it creative.

IV. Describe how the world normally works

1. Source of water in montgomery
2. Rivers and their influences
3. Pollution

V. Describe the way we must solve a problem if disaster occurs.

1. Money or costs
2. Staff, or people that can help our plan
3. Buildings

VI. Describe opposing views/ different ways to solve the problem

VII. Conclusion Part 1: Explain again why your choice is the best.

VIII. Call to action: Explain what work needs to be done, explain limits of your proposal.

Create your OWN outline, filling in the specifics from your project. Make it parallel.

Parallel structure: means that all grammatical and stylistic choices look the same.

BLOG 8.5

Review:

Caleb Jones explains that people who do not go into nature are “cowardly”. Although the word cowardly is too strong here, I do think we all could use more nature.

In the works cited entries OR in the text itself, small stuff = “quotations”, large=italics

The first thing you need to know about a source is the first AND last names of the authors

The first time you introduce an author, you’re going to use their full name. After that, use their last name.

Where might you get help to cite something

Owl purdue

Library

Teacher

Easybib/Citation machines/

What three things are a part of an annotation?

Author, title, date, sometimes journals/numbers

Citation, Summary, Evaluation

What three things are a part of an annotation

Given a topic in January–the apocalyptic event

Narrow thesis topic–health care in the apocalypse

Hypothesis–

In high school you have your thesis first, and then you look up sources that support that. CONFIRMATION BIAS

Extreme tourism–my topic

I do research and read different types of sources and THEN–

Hypothesis: Using extreme tourism to become famous online is an insult to the people who have survived the disaster.

Thesis:

In this project a set of Instagram photos that I found online illustrated my point: that extreme tourism, especially done right after the event, os disrespectful to the survivors.

10 sources; 5 should be from scholarly journals and 5 can be online

Use pop culture texts.

Topic: grieving after a disaster/ setting up services

On my first few pages I want to share examples of grieving from the movies. One place many fans grieved alongside their characters was in the film Avengers: Infinity War. This film features a group of heroes who try to stop the evil Thanos from destroying half of humankind. In the conclusion to this film, most viewers were heartbroken when they saw Iron Man holding Spiderman, who disappeared into ash. Likewise, Capt America sank to his knees to see his best friend vanish before his eyes. These moments might be similar to ones we have experienced in disasters.

Chernobyl Diaries. Directed by Brad Parker, performances by __and__, 2012, Amazon Prime, Link to movie,

This film shows what happens to a group of young adults who travel to Chernobyl. The horror comes when they are stranded on site and begin to face the terrors within the buildings. Although this movie was not a hit, and although there are many predictable moments, I found the shots of the scenery most helpful to my upcoming research. The presence of a couple taking photos also gave me good ideas about what to write.

Wechsler, Amy. The Mind and Beauty Connection. “9 Days to Less Stress, Gorgeous Skin, and a Whole New You”.

Breyer, Melissa. ” 5 sunscreen ingredients to avoid”. May 22, 2018.

The relevance of both of these articles to my topic are easily recognizable. These articles will play a role in me finding the ingredients for a sunscreen that will be allergy friendly and will be gentle on people’s skin. Both of these articles are fairly current and up to date so I feel as though they will both pass the “c” part of the CRAAP test. The Authorship is both by people who are either scholar’s or have experienced these things hands-on or both. All in all these articles pass my evaluation as useful for my project and I will certainly give their credit where it is due.

Blog 7.5 (based on blog 7–Joanna Wolfe article)

Make a citation for this piece

Wolfe, Joanna. “Rhetorical Numbers: A Case for Quantitative Writing in the Composition Classroom,” vol 61, no 3, CCC. February 2010, pp 434-457.

The author talks about how quantitative writing is just as important as classical rhetorical analysis and how it should be taught in schools. She proposes new assignments and ways to train teachers for this purpose. Wolfe gives examples of where we see this in society and how important changing pit teaching methods is. I found the source relatable due to the stories about the grocery store and the pregnant lady.

1-2 sentences of summary

1st sentence is the thesis

2nd sentence explains HOW the person achieves the thesis/what they do

Evaluate the source for relevance, purpose, and currency (CRAAP– take out the author and accuracy part because of peer review) This part should be about 2-3 sentences.

(big sources use italics, smaller sources, like articles use “”)

Ex: Thank You, Next album

“Seven Rings” song

Jones, Caleb. Camping Out. Auburn Montgomery Press, 2019.

1. The State of the World

1. Numbers are everywhere
2. People assume numbers are always right OR that they’re fake

II. The problem to Be Fixed

1. Students are not taught about  numbers and how persuasive they are
2. Teachers aren’t prepared to teach them.

III. The Solution: most important section

1. Train teachers how to teach this part of rhetoric
2. Train students on how to deal with numbers in the real world

THIS IS JUST LIKE WHAT YOUR PROJECT WILL DO!!!!

1. State of Things

1. Percentage of tornadoes in Southern States
2. History of tornadoes in Montgomery

II. Problem to be Solved’

1. Drills aren’t safe for students
2. New methods haven’t been used in many years.

III. Solution

Your solution shouldn’t be too big: Plant an entire farm, build the hospital, quarantine sick people, solve the government problem by setting up new ways, clean the streets

Blog 8: find two sources for your project, put the MLA info for them, and summarize them.

The required reading for this class was an article entitled “Rhetorical Numbers: A Case for Quantitative Writing in the Composition Classroom”. The article was written by Joanna Wolfe. This article went into great detail about ways authors support an argument, and how readers are often fooled into believing these authors. Wolfe also writes about how quantitative presentation of information can often make statistics seem truthful when in reality the way they are presented is what makes them truthful. Wolfe goes on to say many people aren’t prepared to read between the lines and see what is true and what is not. I think Wolfe did a good job of talking about the dangers of not being able to sift through presentation rhetoric. Wolfe also did a good job of explaining how prevalent quantitative presentation rhetoric is. I did not like how she used big confusing words for no purpose but to try to confuse the reader. There is also a slight amount of jargon that I dislike but other than that is was a well-done, informative article

Blog 6

Review from Feb:

Email to best friend

Topic: deals with Chernobyl and extreme tourism, write them and tell them whether they should go to C

Email: Most agreed it was dangerous, You cited sources to back up what you were saying. You were trying to find people who agree with you. This is the method of grade school/high school.

Example from your major where you had to read the databases on the AUM website: you were asked to disagree with an expert.

I(insert example)

We’ve had 2 examples–one where we agreed (chernobyl) and one where we disagreed(article about your major)

We’re starting to practice Binary Thinking (remember exercise in class). We can’t believe that there are only 2 options. There’s more.

From your book–

“Refusing to spend time with nature is cowardly because it is a significant part of our environment. We can’t ignore it.”

Although I believe that the word cowardly is a bit unfair, I do agree that Americans should spend time outdoors.

(ambivalent thinking)

Research is a conversation among different perspectives. Rarely are those perspectives just a binary.

Why did I quote Caleb Jones word for word? Why not summarize the source?

Dear friend, I urge you not to travel to Chernobyl for Spring Break. Based on multiple scholarly articles, I have come to the conclusion that the conditions in Chernobyl are not safe for tourists. Daniel Burkner wrote in his abstract of the article, “The Chernobyl Landscape and the Aesthetics of Invisibility”, that there is invisible radiation that is still in the area and still harmful. There is no reason to risk your life for the thrill of an adrenaline pump. I feel that being chased by a dog or playing paintball will suffice for a shot of adrenaline. I am certain all of my research is correct from peer-reviewed sources because I discovered the information from google scholar. Again, I urge you not to go, no thrill seek is worth your life.

-Sincerely, Solomon

https://heinonline.org/HOL/LandingPage?handle=hein.journals/envpola44&div=70&id=&page=

https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.2752/175145214X13936100122282

https://scholarworks.iu.edu/journals/index.php/aeer/article/view/2005

While searching to find out what happened in Fukoshima, Japan in 2011, I used the Iceberg method of research to come across this wiki link https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fukushima_Daiichi_nuclear_disaster#Units_1,_2,_and_3. This is a notable source because of the scholars who confirmed the factual evidence in the article. Over 1000 people died due to radiation in Japan. In 2011, an earthquake hit Japan and not long following a tsunami hit it as well. Due to the tsunami hitting, 3 nuclear reactors cooled, causing a nuclear accident. I learned all of this information due to 3 sources I found via the iceberg method. The first source I previously stated, the second I found off of a link on CNN’s website, http://www.world-nuclear.org/information-library/country-profiles/countries-g-n/japan-nuclear-power.aspx. The last of these sources I found through a couple clicks on BBC’s website. I originally found an article about the disaster but by clicking a link at the bottom of that article and then doing it again with the next article. I discovered that Xenon, in specific, was the chemical exposed to the public. The articles URL is https://www.bbc.com/news/15550270.

Blog 2.5

1. Orientation
   1. Overview of your project (p2)
   2. Weapon exercise: group activity where you had to pick a weapon that would be useful during a disaster/apocalypse (too narrow a topic).
   3. Create a blog for your “short assignments.” Anne Lamott wrote about how every day we can write a short amount and get things done
   4. Describe a situation where you lost power, water, etc.

II. Day Two

1. Interview 2 classmates about their experience. Interviews can count as primary sources. You just have to give credit to the right person and make sure they were a witness. Gathered raw data with their answers. We then used it to make a fake research paper that day.
2. HW: read “Campus Plumber”

III. Day Three

1. NPR and “Fake News”
2. Healthday.com use of pills
3. Al.com about where our water comes from
4. “Campus Plumber”

IV. Day Four

1. Iceberg Technique- going down the rabbit hole, following the trail, going deeper, digging deeper. Start somewhere simple like History.com but then follow the trail, go deeper. Follow other links that go to published essays, books, and movies.
2. CRAAP test can help you determine which sources are trustworthy.

C-Currency/ how long ago was it written

R-Relevance/ how important is it to your topic

A-Accuracy/Are there errors in the info

A-Authorship/Is the author qualified to make these claims

P-Purpose/why was it written

Blog 3: Find three trustworthy sources that tell you about Fukoshima. I want you to use the “Iceberg Technique”.

The first time I remember losing power I was around six years old. I recall being asleep when lightning flashed outside my window. My mother gathered me and my siblings into the hallway, while my dad tried to check the weather channel to find out more about what the storm was doing, but the television would not work. My mom went to bring me and my brothers blankets and attempted to turn the light on and nothing happened. Realizing the power was out, my mom grabbed flashlights and my dad listened for the weather on a pocket radio. I and my siblings slept soundly the rest of that night knowing that our parents were right there with us, even though it was storming outside and the power was out.